After filming the footage, we then put together a rough cut to see what is working and what needs to be improved.
Feedback from Mr. Harrison
POSITIVE:
- The camerawork - the cinematography/composition is fantastic. From the short siding at the beginning to the depth of field as the boy plays with toy.
- The drone shot - is AMAZING - not just because its drone shot but because it put the house in context - giving it a 2D effect much like the 2D pictures the boy is drawing.
- There's a clear representation of a lonely, isolated, alienated boy - almost feral.
- The music is good choice.
IMPROVEMENTS:
- The creation of the toy takes too long - there's a lot of tying. Could the glitch effect be used again.
- Create a diegetic sound-scape - the steps of the boy, the heavy breath, the scraping of the chalk, laughing of the boy when he plays - will add much more atmosphere.
- It is not obvious to the viewer that the boy is creating an imaginary friend - could you have whispers at the point when the boy looks at the camera suggesting the presence of someone else?
- Or make more of the drawing - close on as he sketches out the drawing - then go to the drone shot.
- Then a close up on the boy looking at the sketch or holding hands with the sketch?
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